推薦答案The main reason I why choose Hong Kong to further my study is that I have been given the permit in principle from the Immigration Department. As we all know, HK is a highly bilingual region that both English and Chinese coexist in daily life. To improve my English proficiency and immerse myself in a more international environment,I consider HK as a good choice for me. HK is also famous for its high-level education. Therefore I want to enter the Hong Kong Baptist University to obtain higher education and pursue unforgettable learning experience.

gammar給你改好了...但..= =" 香港移民局的原則性批準你確定要寫進去嗎?那好像離題了吧
而且完整一點的應該按照以下approach寫:
1. 為甚麼想去香港
2. 為甚麼想去你們學校&這個科系
3. 我未來的發(fā)展路向和你們科系發(fā)展方向的結(jié)合=取錄我是明智的選擇

個人所見，給你參考吧